WANG SI HAN
1009091144
CCT110
After reading the cct109 paper feedback, there are a few issues and points that need to be changed
in the cct110 paper. In the cct109 paper, I was vague about the main ideas I wanted to express in
the paper, organizing my thoughts and arguments was the key, I gave a lot of information but
didn't fully discuss or explain that information in depth, and missed the point . In the essay,
although most of my paragraphs have clear ideas, they lack the support of examples and the
transitions are weak. I need to learn how to transition perfectly from one paragraph to the next.
My content is authentic, but I need to further develop my content, such as examples to support my
claims. I'm pretty good at citations, but I need to understand what information I'm getting from
citations so that they can be better integrated into my essay. The last point is my sentence style,
my sentence lacks variety, and there are some punctuation errors, which I will correct in the
cct110 paper. My article lacks many examples and details to support my point of view, resulting in
my article having a general idea but no details to prove it. This is a big problem, and I will solve it
in the cct110 paper The above are my mistakes in the cct109 paper, and I will correct the above
problems in the cct110 paper.